Jan 5, 2009

The Night and The Dawn

The night was cold, the moon was high,
The wind was calm, stars lit the sky,
The trees gazing at the lovely moonlight,
She could not ask for a better night,
She opened the window, but sheers were drawn,
For her life seemed to have no dawn.

She always heard people say,
It's better to burn out than fade away,
She inhaled, she exhaled, but felt no breath,
Every second she felt a little closer to death,
She never smiled, they made her frown,
They felt she always let them down.

They thought she could never achieve,
Not once did they make her believe,
That she had got what it takes,
and Success is what failure makes,
She felt useless, She felt helpless,
She had tried so hard, but was still clueless.

They walked past her when day was bright,
She felt all lonely in the night,
She lay down on the bed alone,
When suddenly, there, rang a phone.
She said, "Hello?" He was a friend,
He had a helping hand to lend.

He had been watching her observant,
But to seek his help, she was reluctant,
He was the charming boy of all,
And mostly, he was liked by all,
He made her believe, that she could achieve,
She was inspired, she folded up her sleeve!

For she was ready to conquer the world,
It did not matter, how harsh was the world,
She knew there was always a room at the top,
She gave it all, She worked from her top,
He stood always by her side,
She now wanted him by her side.

And together, they made her succeed
She is a flower, they called her a weed,
She looked at him with the broadest smile,
And thanked him for staying all this while,
He turned around, he held her hand,
She felt ground slipping like the loosest sand.

He held her close, Her face was red,
His heart was pounding, She was too scared,
He kissed her lips, She shed a tear,
He said, "I Love You" in her ears,
The sun went down, The night is here,
He whispered again in her ear,

"The night is cold, the moon is high,
The wind is calm, stars lit the sky,
Look at the trees, white in moonlight,
Could you ask for a better night?"
She opened the window and no sheers were drawn,
For after this night, there was a new dawn.


IcE MaiDeN said...

"its better to burn out than to fade away" - kurt cobain..

heard a long time ago, never quite got it. till now. it was a beautiful poem. i felt like i was reading my own thoughts..

mysterious gal said...

wow...someone is an amazing poetess :D
and a beautiful love poem....seems like a fairy tale..neone can dream of....
keep writing
Love ya

Satans Darling™ said...

Thanks Annie,

It is actually my own life story :)

And those words, "It's better to burn out than fade away"... I never found it more apt for anything else but my shituation that time lol!

Glad you liked it :)

Seno said...

As i told you, If i were a little more sensitive , I would have Cried LOL !! :P

I can so relate to dis one !!! :)

Queen of poets

I bow to thy ^:)^ for bringing bak my bitter sweet memories :)

Satans Darling™ said...


Thanks for the compliment yaar, I am not half as good as you trust me!

Love you!

Satans Darling™ said...


Thanks a lot, thanks a lot :P But I hope it brought more sweet memories than the bitter ones :)

Kishore Choudhary said...

what to say? i love to read you
' Bakhuda ab to koi tamnna hee nahi fir ye kya baat hai ki dil kahi lagta hee nahi , sirf chehre kee udaasi se bhara ek ansu dil ka aalam o aapne abhi dekha hi nahi"

Nacho said...

Damn girl, I had no idea you were a poet.. and such a good one :O

Satans Darling™ said...

Kishore : Thanks a lot :) I am trying to read yours too but I am slower at reading in Hindi than speaking in it :P Thanks again!

Hamza : I did not know you were here too :O !! I am gonna read your Blog now :) Thanks for the comment :)

Rajat said...

awesomely super sensationalistic....

sooooo wht did the gal say to him/.... after he told her tht he lovedher??

Satans Darling™ said...

Rajat, What do you think? :)

Rajat said...

its ur poem... temme wt did she say??

Satans Darling™ said...

Rajat, She said she loves him too :P

Nikhil said...

kya baat hai sis...mirza ghalib!!

Really this is poem not to read but to experience..

Awwal darje ki kavita


Satans Darling™ said...

Nikhil, Mirza Galib @-) Baapre...

And thanks for the comment :P
Kya experience kiya re tune? Tu bhi poem likh!

Celestial said...

Hey Ashrita
Thanks for visiting my blog, m glad u liked it. I went thru ur poems... a very good attempt... enjoyed reading it. And the first poem sounded partly like my story too!

Looking forward to more such interesting piece of writings... all the best!!

Satans Darling™ said...

Thanks a lot Celestial! Thanks for liking my Blog :)

Random Thoughts Of My Mind said...

hey shishi went thru it yestrday itself..but cdnt post in coz was having a hard time creating a 'blog':|

very well written..specially wid the last lines ending at a happy note,coz gives me a ray of hope..

Satans Darling™ said...

Glad you liked it Polo :)

The night has to end with a wonderful dawn :)

Apurva said...

ooooooooooh la la! this is HOT!

Satans Darling™ said...

Thank you Apurva :)

Anonymous said...

Epic poetry. And for a beginner...way too good. I believe you should write more.


Satans Darling™ said...

Thanks, but why anonymous :O


that was a good one...
A good friend always has a potential to be a good partner...you are lucky!!

Satans Darling™ said...

Thanks a lot Salil :)

Miss Cynical said...

n yu say i inspired yu to write poem...what crap.. i m nt half as good a yu are!!!..

loved this one a LOT!.. all love story's somewhere can be related hehe.. bought back memories :) *sighs*

अनिल कान्त : said...

बहुत प्यारा लिखती हैं आप ....दिल को उडेल दिया और हम सब देखो भीग गए

मेरी कलम - मेरी अभिव्यक्ति

Brosreview said...

Splendid! A beautiful soft start, a build-up in the middle-section and a grand end - this is what I imagined musically to complement your words. You can turn this to a fine song. Keep writing!!!

Harshad said...

loved it...
could totally identify wit the emotions...

awesum! :D