Apr 27, 2009

Confinement - Another attempt at Acrostic poetry!




Caressing you inside, through my stomach outside,

Oh my little Angel, I have a million things,

No, I do not plan to tell, but I don’t break promises.

Fighter I shall make of you, overcome the toughest,

In this world of coercion, survival is only of the fittest.

No, you will not let anyone bind you,

Every step you take, I will be your support till the end.

Mark my words, this world; it’s an evil place,

Extremely difficult, the free thinker’s life is.

Now promise to be brave, as I set you free, for

This world is just a huge confinement.





A single mother speaks to her baby on the delivery day, just before her water breaks.

I took this up coz Leo asked me to attempt this acrostic. Thanks a ton Leo! I realized many things about myself and life while writing this poem!


43 comments:

Arv said...

a lovely heart felt message.. epitomises the motherhood :)

have a nice evening mate... cheers...

Leo said...

*bows*

ashri, i am serious! when r u giving poetry lessons! i wanna join! :) :)

i loved this acrostic... now on i am gonna bug u to write more! watch out! :D

ps: i can't see invisibility, so do show urself once in a while, when u see me! :)

mysterious gal said...

Bows down ^:)^
thats what i m gonna do to this post of urs.....motherhood is a bliss but when its single one...its filled with more anxious questions abt the future...and ur post seemed to address that all from that courageous mothers side......seriously girl this time to u better give me poetry lessons ....i will wait for them :D

Kishore choudhary said...

this time you are fined tuned

beautiful words

Nikhil said...

great work sis! keep it up

ARUNA said...

this is surely some lovely words from a blissful mother!!

gargi said...

wow..beautiful :)
just like every other time.. im loving this one!

ps..i hated poetry ...lol..you make me love it! Great work!

Amias said...

Mothers are so very precious and protective. While our child is confine inside us, we teach them how to deal with the confinements of the world at large ...

I thank you very much for joining the fun, and writing your acrostic on such a wonderful topic --- giving birth. Even with the pain to me it's the most wonderful thing in the world.

Satans Darling™ said...

Arv,

Thank you so much for liking, you have a good night now :)

Satans Darling™ said...

I would love it if you were to bug me Leo :) Thank you so very much for liking it!

Satans Darling™ said...

Nabs I will coach you if you promise to teach me shayari :) ;)

Satans Darling™ said...

Ahhh finally :)

Thanks a ton Kishore!

Satans Darling™ said...

Thank you so much Nikhil :)

Satans Darling™ said...

Aruna, thank you so much for liking it!

I tried to show that the Mother is releasing the child from the confinement of her womb into this confinement of our world!

Satans Darling™ said...

Thank you so much Gargi! And I am so honored if I made you like poetry :)

Satans Darling™ said...

Exactly Amias!

I am so honored to be attempting something on such a sensitive topic, and I am happy because it touched everyone evn if it is just a little :)

Ragpicker said...

Beauty ! Indeed the world is an evil place but its not that evil actually. Its more like someone said once "evil only prevails when good people fail to act". Its good to see you send some very positive message through this poem. Loved it !

The Pink Orchid said...

I am proud of you!! so very much!!

Quirky Mon said...

I love it :)this is fantabulous!

Sumit said...

wonderful!!

sawan said...

Ashritha, this is beautiful! you take up such strong subjects and shows justice to them with ur words! i am happy i read you. u take care grl :)

Satans Darling™ said...

Hiyaaaaaaa Rag!

So happy to see you comment after so long :)

I was intending to convey the same thing. That the world is an evil place, atleast it is presumed to be so, and that is why the mother asks her child to be a free thinker and not be bound by anyone :)

So glad you liked it! Waiting for something from your end :)

Satans Darling™ said...

Thank you so much Kajal :)

Satans Darling™ said...

Thank you so much Quirky twin :D

Satans Darling™ said...

Thank you Sumit :)

Satans Darling™ said...

Ahhh Sawan, there you are!

Thank you so much! I try to bring up topics which would make a difference :)

Ms.R. said...

OMG! This was B-E-A-U-T-I-F-U-L!!! Just Amazing!

Psst psst.. Will frame this up when I have my lil one comin! My word :)

Satans Darling™ said...

OMG... I am touched Ms. R!

I am so happy that you liked it!

Pretty Me!! said...

the last line was just wow !!! loved this acrostic... glad you attempted :)

PULKIT said...

finally the post came!
and what it was!
a splendid perfection!
very touching and involved one.
loved it to the core of its depth:)
tc god bless ya!

regards
PULKIT
(http://19goes20.blogspot.com)

neeraj_only said...

ahem..unable to find words to say hw..good this poem is :P ....no wonder u r my fav.

"world is evil place"..hehe..baccha dar jaayega...will think...

"kaisi maa hai!!?....b4 coming in this world funda from mom ...pata nahi aage kya hoga!!."

Miss Cynical ღ Åйu ღ said...

sensitive. Precise. Beautiful.

:)

ps: you can write about anything and everything.. thats really so good!

Aditi..............:) said...

Very touching indeed....you have talent and also the a very true heart....keep it up babe :)

Miss Sunshine said...

yayyyyyyyyyyyyyiiiiiiiiieeeeeeeee... so wunnerful! :)
so beautiful!
when u adopt me na, (as i am still a bachha to you :| )
yeh gaana, okay?
it is so pretty and nice and wonderful, and so adult-like.
lol :P
i loved it. my favourite post on ur blog :)

Little Girl Lost said...

sd- THIS IS ONE OF THE BEST ACROSTICS I'VE READ :) i loved it so much...

Little Girl Lost said...

please read the poems on my blog and tell me what you think. your input as a poet would be very valuable... (just scroll down a few posts and you'll find them)

Satans Darling™ said...

Thank you SO much Little girl lost :) I'm just going to your blog to read those poems :)

workhard said...

Hi.. sorry for dropping in so late.. im scared to say im busy..;)

What an assuring poem.. love it.. really..

im off to poetpourri:)

Cheers

Ramu's Corner said...

I stongly beleive the making of a soul starts right from the mother's womb and this post is just a reflection of it.

Mother-child relationship is one of the divine things happening in life and this post is just an added crown to it!!

Keep Posting!

Brosreview said...

Hmm, very heartfelt, this one! Very alleviating too. You provide us readers an insight on the thought-process of a mother during pregnancy.

The last two lines are fantastic! Keep writing!!!

Satans Darling™ said...

Thank you so much workhard :)

Satans Darling™ said...

Thank you Ramu, I agree with you :)

Satans Darling™ said...

Thank you so much Brosreview :)