When the fantasy had ended,
Horrors turned true, Promises were false,
Except an end there was no solution,
Never had she imagined, he would be such a crook.
In the tenure of a beautiful lie,
There were a thousand dreams,
Soaring high, until it all crashed down.
Oh, what a disgusting sight that was,
Viewing her own husband with a woman stranger,
Every moment flashed in her eyes forever, the
Rascal still flaunts his ego!
Jewels and Riches he gifted were burnt, for
Unfaithfulness still lingered,
Says he, “Please forgive me, I love you so..”
That’s supposed to make her feel better?
“Better off alone than live with you, cheat!
Over it is, it was never meant to be,
What a show! Go on and take a bow…” Said she.
P.S. This is my try at the same acrostic which Leo has posted on his blog. It's just a try, and as soon as I heard the title the only song that played in my mind was Rihanna - Take A Bow. So I built the poem around it!
43 comments:
wow girl....ur going places with ur poems....just the apt words and the apt title and the apt acrostic...coupled with the most perfect feeling and emotions......ur just amazing dear
so when r u giving me poetry lessons?
Muaahz
Wow thanks so much Nabs I am so glad you like my poetry. How can I give you lessons when I have so much to learn from you :)
AMAZING!
i loved it!
write more :D
xoxox
WOW! Thanks amazing! I loved the theme! Damn good acrostic.
I knew you would like it Gargi!!! That was one thing I was darn sure about! :D
Love,
xoxox
SO glad you liked it Ms. R!!!
first attempt and such brilliance.. wow.. accept a bow.. :D
Wow, thanks for liking it Kajal, I accept that bow ^:)^
Ah...that was nice...took me by bit of surprise :)
well done..keep it up.!
Love reading u n following u for some time!
Do visit mine..tk care !
Cheers,
AKG
*BOWS*
lol :P
superb!!
Thank you so much Hopeless Romantic... Thanks for liking my stuff... Will visit yours too :)
Take Care and Cheers!
Thank you little miss Sunshine :D
gud 1.
Your 1st 2 lines actually pulled the truth bare naked.
I too am tryng my hand at acrostics.
And it was wndrful to see yours
~Harsha
Ashrita, are you ok ?
I love that song!
and really liked ur post here too!
seeing this pic... after the whole issue on WL was again a refresh!
:D
brilliant work as always!
and yeah...
what pen name u have... it sounds a real good one! :) (smiles!)
god bless!
regards
PULKIT
Awesome !
& I lurv..Rihanna's Take a bow :)
I love the theme, and I so enjoyed the acrostic .. this was good for a first timer ... thank for joining the fun!
By the way, I am old, but I like Rihanna "Take A Bow" ... and if I was near Chris Brown, I would kick his but out of town!
wow! :D
ashri, kab de rahi ho poetry lessons? mujhe bhi invite kar lo! pleej! :)
ashrita, thts the best acrostic ive read till date! it has a story, pain, emotions, challenges, decisions made and varying phases of life! beautiful. way to go grl :)
hey Ashrita, that was a very nice poem sweety!!It is a combination of so many things........very beautiful dear!
Thats again another amazing poem!! :)
Maglomaniac... All the best with you acrostic and thanks a ton for liking mine :)
Kishoreji, I am absolutely fine, it's just fictional matter :P
Pulkit,
Oh believe you me! I have added a soft focus to that picture.... Twice! It was much bolder before :P Thanks a ton for liking my work and liking my pen name :) :)
Me too fms! I love that song! Thanks for liking the poem! :)
Hey Amias, thank you so much from liking it, it means a lot coming from you :) I would have loved to join Acrostic Only, but my main concern is that I cannot be regular at it, so I let it be :(
I love the song too, and hmm Chris Brown, well as much as I like him, I soooo wanna give him that whack!
Leo :P
Yeh kya mazaak hai :D How can I give lessons to a pro :D!!
Sawan,
Thank you so much for liking it! I must say I am getting used to waiting for your comments on my blog posts by now :)
Thank you so much Aruna :)
Thank you so much Aditi! I am so glad you liked it :)
the wait is mutual. i wait for ur posts too :)
main aa gaya!!! :)
did read ur poem last-night, but at the same time last night me did read , kajal's entry. So did't comment......she made every1 senti with her post.
nw about ur post : acrostic!! , new experiment , good one , well written ,aur mast topic.
loved the lines "go on and take a bow"..u rock ashrita!!
p.s :tomorrow one post from me....derived 4m something u said earlier. look for that...kal!!
How sweet is that Sawan! :)
Those lines are from the song Neeraj :P
Waiting for your post!
haah haan...aaj hi dekha wo song...song is just like ur poem :P
wow..Its pretty cool. I loved it :)
Take a Bow - I like dat song too :)
Hai na Neeraj :D
Thanks so much for liking it Vani, I love the song too!
ash ash ash...pure class yaar!!...and this time around i know what acrostic means :)...
Yes when its over, just bow...and as this poem ends..i bow..coz thats how good this has been!!..kudos to u yaar
cya once i get back..
loads of luv,
amith
Thank you soooooooo much Amith! Get back to yourself soon :)
Cheers!
very good. Actually i am not that much into poetry but this was so simple mujhe bhi samajh aa gayi. lol
Umm, I reckon you intended this to be more prose-like than poetry. I mean, I see a few lines here to be poetic whereas a few to being prose-like.
Having written that, I like the way you've expressed this quite neatly, barren of any analogies. Although that very factor makes it quite clichéd, I felt it as I like the monologue/dialogue style implemented.
Keep writing!!!
PS: It also qualifies to being a voice-over for any film.
Thank you :D I love the way you analyze everything!
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