Dreaded by the contradiction with my heart,
Empty it is, my Devil's workshop,
And in the mirror of Denial
Faces my inner insight,
Engulfing me from top to bottom,
No, they do not accept
Invites for confrontations;
Neither do they deny, They refuse to
Go away from inside me, let me talk.
Speech is what
I need, to convey them to you,
Love is what
Entangles the two.
New games they play, The mind and heart,
Chasing me away from myself,
Expectations make it tougher to talk.
This is my first attempt at Acrostic poetry. When the mind and the heart are on a war, there is a deafening silence. It makes conversation impossible.
31 comments:
Empty is my Devil's Workshop -- can't be any more honest than this
Chasing me away from myself
expectations make it tougher to talk --- thats one fucking great insight ... indeed its the drug and soul that comes out from this line I guess....
Ash .. this indeed is the best lines I feel you have written so far. Loved it each and every line,word,alphabets and the nothingness in between. This is the first poem I read in the morning and I feel so damn good.
Self-separation is really the battle of communication between the mind and the heart , and you just placed this war through a timeless poetry !!!!!!!!!
Loved it , loved it , loved it ... :)
oh ..simply good one :)
long ago (6-7 months back) i had sketched one cartoon on this theme and named that "me v/s myself".
yes there is always conversation in "devils's workshop" ( this workshop is inside everyone).
my favourite line from your this poem is
#"the mind and heart, chasing me away from myself , expectations make it tougher to talk.
waiting more from you....."big-gun" of poetry turning into "canon" U..hehe..carry on :P
cheers!
"No they do not accept
Invites for confrontations;
Neither do they deny"
hmmm... the past three days I've been shutting doors on people... trying to figure out myself... me and the alter ego that just has to spoil all good I do... and now when i reflect back after reading you... I realise they both have a heart and a mind... ONE each!!!
A round table conference with just me for the obvious??? scary :(
ooooh lala! i love these types of poems! whatever they are called..lol! :P haha! nice, really nice and meaningful!
Oh Rag, thank you so much for loving it! And yes, you are very right... It is the weed this time! A whole new story while I was on a high!
Glad I made your day :)
Hey Neeraj :)
I would love to see your sketch on this one!
It indeed is very tough to talk, while one is numbed by the war between their mind and heart!
aZoed... Hi5 mate, I am going through the same ordeal, only mine is 1000 times worse as it has been a whole one month since I have openly confronted anyone! And although you wanna speak a million things, shut people up on their faces, you just stand there numb and clueless as there are another series of questions in your mind and heart which render you speechless.
Apurva,
I love them too! And the most challenging yet easy part is that you have to pick and word and expand the poem such that it explains the word. I like it best that way :)
one of the most meaningful Acrostics i have ever read !! really liked this one :)
Dreaded by the contradiction with my heart,
Empty it is, my Devil's workshop,
Excellent! You are getting better by the day! ;-)
Dreaded by the contradiction with my heart,
Empty it is, my Devil's workshop,
"the mind and heart, chasing me away from myself , expectations make it tougher to talk"
My fav lines..
Yea You against your self is the most difficult battle to fight..
Gr8 job done here...!!!
Kudosss...
*hugs*
and I m in love with Acrostic.. and my love keeps getting stronger wen i read sch lovely work..:)
awesome work ashrita.
why are they always on war,
the mind and the heart? :(
Thanks a lot Prats :) Means a lot coming from you :)
Thanks Seno ;) Do check your email!
Thank you Charzzzz :) *Hugssss*
Thank you Kajal :)
Well I will have a happy one coming up soon :) Aaj kal dark phase chal raha hai! :P
Besides I think I suck at happy poetry :P But yes I will come up with one soon dearie :)
That is so true, what u call is an internal conflict.. Just love your poetry...:)
Thank you so much Workhard :)
I had to go back and read it twice to get to the depth of it. Really nice!
Ma fav lines:
New games they play, The mind and heart,
Chasing me away from myself,
Expectations make it tougher to talk.
बहुत खूबसूरत खयालात लिखें हैं
मेरी कलम - मेरी अभिव्यक्ति
Thanks so much Fati :)
Thank you so much Anil :)
this is great..acrostic poetry..needs intelligence..awesome
Thanks a ton Saif :)
Best form of acrostic poetry i have read lately...and well it aptly defines the deafening silence....wish it was easier to come out of it.....
Keep writing
i dunno wat acrostic poetry is but if this is it?? i like i like!! :-)...how do u come up with such stuff??geez...too good!!..hats off and u can even keep it..hehe ;-)
Thanks Nabs!
Amith by now I think you must have googled Acrostic poetry or something but if not, I will try here:
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And then I have tried to expand and explain it through the poetry :)
yep, i did google it...actually i googled it b4 i commented but thought the comment was nicer the way i did it ;-)....also interaction bhi ho gaya na ;-)
Yeah yeah ;)
Okay, I like the lines in this one. But, the framework is inconsistent. But, then it is your earlier attempts and I can tell it without reading our footnote.
Good luck!
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