It was 45 degrees Celsius outside. She was numb with the heat outside and the still cold marble on which she stood bare naked, staring up at it. Her hair was open, and she could feel the warm air brushing through her entire body yet giving her goosebumps from that intense sensation. A million thoughts raced through her mind, all at the same time, there was no room for wonder or no sense in making sense out of anything. Everything she was ever fearful about had suddenly come true. All her insecurities were taking a shape of reality. This was the time. The time to conquer all her fears.
As she looked at that shower head she thought of all the things she had ever been scared of. Right from her fear of heights, to losing her friends and love, to this, her fear of a cold, chilled shower. This was the busiest crossroad of her life, and an inner voice said to her that it was high time she started everything afresh without the fear factor.
The clock was ticking. She had been standing in the same position for the past one hour. In that time she had "almost" turned that faucet about a hundred times, but then she stopped herself just at that thought of facing one of the biggest concerns in her life. She thought that her heart would stop beating the very moment that chilled water touched her skin.
Finally she just closed her eyes, and turned that faucet for once. The water was colder than expected, and she did skip a heartbeat when it touched her skin. But then, she started enjoying it. The longest and coldest shower of her life changed her, changed her life, for good.
P.S. This is my first attempt at fiction. I wanted to stretch it a bit longer but since I have been out of touch off late I did not strain much on it.
38 comments:
Nice... I liked it! I fact loved it!Welcome Baccckkkk!!!! ♥
feels sooo good....commenting on ur post , missed doing this for quite some time :P
fiction!!, i know u will rock here too like poems. this blog entry is acchi suruwaat of fiction days .....as this was "chota".....time nahi kaga padhne me..lol....small is b'ful
cheers!!
very nice...
i just LOVE reading your blog!!!
mwah!!!
take care :)
very well written!
इतनी कड़ी है धूप कि पत्तों पे आजकल
चढ़ता नहीं है रंग ज़र्द के सिवा !!
Thank you so much Fati :)
Right back at you Neeraj! Feels so good to comment back on your comments ;) Have been missing this space for quite some time now too :D So glad you liked it! I know it is short, I will try something longer the next time! :)
Gargi! SAME TO YOUIn big block bold letters :)
Thanks for liking it!
Thank you so much Kishore ji :)
I like it because it is short.. Simple and sweet and so damn true! Face your fears and your heart wont stop beating!
Exactly Rashi :) You said it!
wow i loved it as always....actually could had my blood rushing in and out through and out
b/w cold shower and u :P
fiction or not...but someone is truly trying to conquer fears :)
Loved yr fiction like all ur posts as always :D
Lovely... it's all about leaving your fears behind you... extremely well written... :)
Heyyyyy Darling..... im back.. that made me want to step in the cold shower right now....so badly...Love the pic...
hahaha that was nice Ashrita......and yeah there is a lot of truth in it. Hey u r back...welcome!!!
wow...the way you have described the whole scene...kudos...thumbs up!!
Nabs,
Me! I have started to take that cold shower too ;) Thanks to the heat in Mumbai/Delhi. Now you know where the inspiration came from!
Thanks a lot Akansha... Conquering fears is one herculean task! Thank you so much for liking it!
Hello workhard :D
Welcome back! So good to see you again in here :) Thanks for liking it!
Hello Aruna,
Thanks a ton for liking it, and I have to mention that I did go through your blog this afternoon and tried those sweet Kajas this evening. I could not eat it since I am off sweets for sometime but it is over already :D Everyone loved it!
Sandeep,
Oh My God! The Big B of WL on my blog.. Kya baat hai! I am so honored that you even read my stuff :P Thank you so much for dropping by and thank you even more for liking my work!
u have managed to put up a great shot!
:)
loved the overall vision of this blog!
m now a follower here !!
:)
that shows how much I loved the work...
regards
god bless!
PULKIT
(http://19goes20.blogspot.com)
You write fiction too..great one..nice pic :-)
HMMMPPHHH!!!..i m soo not talkin to u!!..u r back and u didnt let me know!!!u r lucky i m in a good mood young lady, hence i will comment.
I luvd it and the almost turning on the faucet is so me when i was a kid..hehe..as always be it poetry ya fiction u write classy stuff.. glad u r back ;-)
luv,
amith
Thank you so much Pulkit, Keep dropping by!!
Now I do write fiction too Saif :P Thanks a lot for liking it. And yeah I can guarantee that whether the reader likes the matter or not, they will definitely love the pic :P
Great to know that you are back...
and obviously fresh with your thoughts....yeah thats a good start for the fiction tale....let it grow bigger.....you write so well!! :)
Amithhhhhhhhh!!
I am soooooooooooooooo SORRY! My bad :( I should have let you know :(( Maafi sarkar... Pleaseeee!
I hope you read this while you are still in that good mood of yours and forgive me :)
The almost turning the faucet, that was you as a kid.... That is me till date! I actually take my bath in hot water even during summers! This time it is a little too hot here so I have to make do with lukewarm water :|
Thank you so much Aditi, thanks a ton for the encouragement :)
Ashrita, this is beautiful! and it has the right length. good one :) u wud want to write more on the genre fiction :) u have fun grl.
mast hai! i fell like taking a bath now..
"chubhti jalti garmi ka mausam aaya"
:P
Thank you so much for encouraging me more Sawan :)
Make sure it's a cold shower Apurva ;)
Good post... Is this outta ur personal life :p
hey - so u r back.. :)))
gud piece.. a cold shower can rly haunt us.. despite skippin heart beats evry time, i prefer that to a hot shower.. am totly a cold person..
u hav wndrfly descrbd the 1st fears ash..
Nikhil shut uppppppppp... yeah just the cold shower part ;)
Sulo Badri...
Yes I am back! I salute a cold shower person such as you :D I always take time in going into a cold shower :(
Glad you liked it!
cold shower on a cold morning, thanks to the boiler breaking down... reminded me of that!! brrrr.....
brr...but theres nothing like a cold shower when its 44 degrees outside!
well done...
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